Nobody liked your project idea, so we are not going to give you any funding. The first version is a weaker statement, emphasizing facts not directly relevant to its point. The second version provides the information in a simple and direct manner. But you don’t need to be an expert on style to know that the first phrasing is diplomatic and respectful (even though it’s less concise) as compared with the second version, which is unnecessarily harsh and likely to provoke a negative reaction.
Composing the Body. Strike the Right Tone: The tone of the letter must be formal, clear and polite. Do not use fancy, lengthy, and big words. One must be persuasive in the letter. Use of Personal Pronoun: One can use the personal pronouns in a business letter. If writing on behalf of the organization one must use ‘we’ instead of ‘I’. Write Precisely and Clearly: The content of the letter must be precise, clear, brief, and easily understandable. Use the Active Voice: Always write your letter in an active voice. Be Courteous: Always write a letter in a polite and respectful way. Always use courteous words. Use Additional Pages: If the matter is not fitting in one page of the letterhead, use the second page. One must keep in mind to include the page number on the second and subsequent pages.